Thread:My Wunderwaffle iz missin/@comment-5074855-20121202133935/@comment-1763478-20121203010519

It looks like you've got a promising new protagonist. I noticed the service in Afghanistan part was also mentioned in Early Life and then expanded into more detail in the actual service seciton of the biography. I suggest that you erase the first part of the service and expand a bit on his childhood. Don't forget to add more as you write and more of the character is revealed.

If you need anything else, just let me know!