Talk:The War: VIETNAM/@comment-2098737-20130224042924

You have a good idea but no clear action (by action I mean that it isn't well pieced together). You threw the text together in huge blocky paragraphs w/t any eye space to give the readers' eyes a break. You should avoid bunching together a lot of speaking lines together because the quotation marks around words are exactly what draws the reader in, but having too much gives them just a messy headache to read.