User blog comment:Speical ops genral minigun/zombie fanfic(PLESE JOIN)/@comment-24476373-20110102140603

Hey, Your writing isn't the best, no offense, so would you like me to edit it and correct mistakes? I may change things like how an action is worded or what a person says, but it will stick to the storyline.

Also, you should add weapons and keep it separate from equipment, as well as separate description into Personality (How they act), Appearance (What they look like), and Bio (Their back story). You could even include accent if you wanted. And you need to name the time it takes place in. (Is it WWII, Vietnam war, Desert storm [Iraq in 1990], enduring freedom [Afghanistan today]?)

Also, pretty much all of my character's stuff can't be decided until you name when the fanfic takes place. I can only give you his name, as all of the other stuff depends on the era.

Name: Tristan Frederickson