Talk:Zero Hour/@comment-1044705-20121026221907

Interesting story so far. I like the raw emotion displayed and the cold, calculating nature of the story's powerful characters. The idea of sacrificing some lives for the greater good is an intriguing theme in this story, and as bad as it may sound, it's fascinating to see how some people think of lives as just numbers, instead of thinking about the value of each individual they cut down.

One issue though is that you present a lot of names to the reader in a very short period of time. I haven't played Modern Warfare 2 in a while, but I'm able to understand most of what you're saying. Still, I wasn't quite sure who the narrator at the beginning was, and a little ways into the story, I started to lose track of who was who when all they are to me are names and there's little to distinguish one from the other.

Nonetheless, this is very well written, and I await your next update. Ciao.